Review for: Desperate Measures
reviewed by Matt Kosorok


Date: 08-10-2009 11:11 pm
Score:

David Brinn comes to mind. There is quite a bit here that is alien, and can prevent a reader from getting interested in the subject matter. I love the alien race "itorian', that's totally cool. The Ogden Empire sounds a little too close to the Utah city ( Ogden is about 20 to 30 minutes north of Salt Lake City, Utah ). I'd try to change that a little bit ( like Ok'Tann or something similar ). One important thing I noticed with the direct use of Drand's name over and over. Of all the names, really. Its important to mix up a bit how you refer to people. Using something other than their name. Sometimes this takes a bit of rewriting and trying new things, breaking it up into sections. Avoid expository, though. One thing I keep getting told is "show them, don't tell them", and that's really hard to do sometimes.